so you wanna give up?

meandering streams
deeply fractured dreams
crashed beacon flashes distress
disrupt gentle flow
rapids drop below
dashed upon rocks of progress

progressively sharp
stout conscience does harp
fight hard for what you believe
injustice persists
official lie twists
leaders will always deceive

For the d’Verse prompt today, it is the alouette, created by Jan Turner, that consists of two or more stanzas of 6 lines each, with the following set rules: Meter: 5, 5, 7, 5, 5, 7. Rhyme Scheme: a, a, b, c, c, b

33 thoughts on “so you wanna give up?

  1. you and everyone else at dverse makes it look so easy! I just can’t get my head around the thing as a whole. Well, LOL! that one form I will fail at and it really isn’t that hard, it seems it’s just hard for me right now. LOL! I counted out your syllables (like in tanka!) and the rhymes you used….and you got it! And the message is good, not trite. That is my problem with rhyme. It sounds trite in my mouth/pen. Thank you, Brian for a good example but a better message in your alouette.

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  2. No, we can’t give up. We just have to keep our mind focused on positivity and see how our future unfolds. You made a great statement without going down the path of dredging up all the…well, you know. Thanks for adding your voice to the alouette!


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