meandering streams
deeply fractured dreams
crashed beacon flashes distress
disrupt gentle flow
rapids drop below
dashed upon rocks of progress
progressively sharp
stout conscience does harp
fight hard for what you believe
injustice persists
official lie twists
leaders will always deceive
For the d’Verse prompt today, it is the alouette, created by Jan Turner, that consists of two or more stanzas of 6 lines each, with the following set rules: Meter: 5, 5, 7, 5, 5, 7. Rhyme Scheme: a, a, b, c, c, b
you and everyone else at dverse makes it look so easy! I just can’t get my head around the thing as a whole. Well, LOL! that one form I will fail at and it really isn’t that hard, it seems it’s just hard for me right now. LOL! I counted out your syllables (like in tanka!) and the rhymes you used….and you got it! And the message is good, not trite. That is my problem with rhyme. It sounds trite in my mouth/pen. Thank you, Brian for a good example but a better message in your alouette.
Yeah! Me, too. Sonnets used to give me diarrhea . I would hide when the prompt at ERWA was sonnet. They scared me to death….but what was so weird, they changed my ‘voice’ in writing. That was an eyeopener. But I still hate rhyming.
No, we can’t give up. We just have to keep our mind focused on positivity and see how our future unfolds. You made a great statement without going down the path of dredging up all the…well, you know. Thanks for adding your voice to the alouette!
There Are More Poets than Stars in the Firmament 
you and everyone else at dverse makes it look so easy! I just can’t get my head around the thing as a whole. Well, LOL! that one form I will fail at and it really isn’t that hard, it seems it’s just hard for me right now. LOL! I counted out your syllables (like in tanka!) and the rhymes you used….and you got it! And the message is good, not trite. That is my problem with rhyme. It sounds trite in my mouth/pen. Thank you, Brian for a good example but a better message in your alouette.
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Thanks. I don’t naturally think in rhyme so it’s hard for me even though it may read easy. Sonnets and couplets give me the willies.
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Yeah! Me, too. Sonnets used to give me diarrhea . I would hide when the prompt at ERWA was sonnet. They scared me to death….but what was so weird, they changed my ‘voice’ in writing. That was an eyeopener. But I still hate rhyming.
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me no like rhyme
take too much time
sound great in head
rather be in bed
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Me no like rhyme, too…
It make me boo-hoo
Thars monsters beneath
with all else that creeps
and I rather have chocolate instead!
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No, we can’t give up. We just have to keep our mind focused on positivity and see how our future unfolds. You made a great statement without going down the path of dredging up all the…well, you know. Thanks for adding your voice to the alouette!
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Thanks for hosting. We need to get back to civil discourse. It’s gonna get cold the next couple of mornings. BRRRRRR
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It’s my pleasure to host, you’re welcome. Civil discourse, what a concept… How refreshing would that be.
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I think your poem speaks of the last few days.
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Thanks. The hard feelings will fade and the work will go on.
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It is painful when leaders deceive.
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It’s part of the job I think.
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Your Alouette sums up the thoughts and feelings of the last couple of days, Brian, not just for the USA but for the whole world.
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Thank you Kim. Time marches on, change comes and we have hope.
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you’ve conquered the meter of this deceptively difficult form from the first meandering streams
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Thank you. I wanted to write something a little lighter but this is what came out.
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Love your meanderings in this and how you go from present to future so smoothly.
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Thanks for commenting. I am reminded that this is not the first time there has been a transition.
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my comment via another blog 🙂
https://theartofenchantment.net/2016/06/25/trickster-times/
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Rhyming puts discipline into one’s thinking. It is quite challenging and good to try it out occasionally!
Hank
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Key word, occasionally. 🙂
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Your poem paints the pain blue.
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People need to think in terms of each other not color.
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Agreed!
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That last line is depressingly true.
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But knowing is the first step to independent thought.
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I think we have no choice but this… I somehow feel we have about the same thoughts on this
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Pretty similar thoughts. A better future is worth fighting for. The problem is the gaping chasm btwn people.
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Reblogged this on the ending society.
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Thanks again. 🙂
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welcome
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Great job tackling the alouette! It is sad that your last line is so true.
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Thanks Mish. I never got around to writing another alouette for the prompt.
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