madly – maple seed
twirls – spawned by axial clock
caught – spider cuts web
opaque glass – wheel’s drone silenced
dawn creeps – wet clay unfinished
hem dew washed – golden
brow kissed – dried flower crown dance
unabashed – lady
my muse – in cool morn shadows
straddles lap – silence broken
The Daily Post prompt
d’Verse prompt
Author’s note: I combined two prompts and two styles of poetry. Each stanza is a Tanka of 5-7-5-7-7 syllables and 22 words to complete a 44-word Quadrille.
Oh, MY. You have no idea how happy your use of FORM alone makes me with this piece. Then, that title! And the words within crackle and dance. Just wonderful.
The techniques of your poetry as you explain here are outstanding and well written poem.
It kind of remains me of something I would write. But your a different writer and I truly respect you. This is my kind of poetry. I love it my friend. 🙂
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Oooh, I like the way this turned out! And I love it when you explain the technicalities of your poetry. 😀
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That’s cause without an explanation it’s just so much blather. 😉
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Rubbish! No it’s not! 🙂
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I especially love the second tanka. the hem dew washed, is such a nice image of a wonderful morning
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That glittering morning light that sparkles in miniature rainbows.
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Brian can you mail me at brudberg@gmail.com
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Oh, MY. You have no idea how happy your use of FORM alone makes me with this piece. Then, that title! And the words within crackle and dance. Just wonderful.
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Thanks! Your enthusiasm makes me do a happy dance. 🙂
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The techniques of your poetry as you explain here are outstanding and well written poem.
It kind of remains me of something I would write. But your a different writer and I truly respect you. This is my kind of poetry. I love it my friend. 🙂
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Thanks for commenting and for your appreciation.
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You are so welcome my friend. 🙂
Say, if you get a chance I like to welcome you to me blog and read my new post. If you want to, if not its cool.
You are an amazing and talented writer. Much respect. 🙂
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Stellar use of the two prompts. I’ve never worked a potter’s wheel but one of my greatest delight is to work in clay. It’s been way too long.
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Thanks. I’ve not done that either but the art of pottery has always interested me.
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Bravo! Splendid work combining the two forms of poetry. Very creative!
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I really like this poem. I added to my favorite page.
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I love tanka poems and yours is stellar Brian ~ The second one is my favorite ~
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Thank you for hosting this week. I enjoy tanka as well. I happen to like the first stanza better. 🙂
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In your explanation it sounds too technical and complicated but it flows naturally and works so well!
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Thanks Kim, I find writing haiku, senyru and tanka a lot of fun.
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Cleverly combined.
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Thanks. 🙂
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